It's a weird habit I have in my own screenwriting. While I don't see it in everyone else's scripts (only occasionally) -- it's something I'll always call out to be fixed. And again -- when I see it in my own scripts, it drives me crazy bonkers!
While it still shows up every once in a while, I've broken my own habit to about the 95% mark.
And of course, there are times when it is absolutely appropriate.
Let's examine an example:
"Susan begins to walk up the street."
What's wrong w/ that, you say? Well, why can't Susan just do it? Why does she need to "begin to walk"? If indeed, there is an abrupt interruption of her walk ahead -- then "begin to" makes sense (always an exception). But what if Susan is going to walk the entire distance, unobstructed? So perhaps this would be better:
"Susan walks up the street." Nifty.
And as is always the case in my own scripts, as well as those I edit -- trimming is key. Imagine that you removed -- let's say -- FIFTEEN of these "begins to" instances in your script. That could mean the trimming of a good three lines or so of total description.
Well, that's not much! It could mean cutting the end of your script to move onto the previous page -- going from 101 pages to 100. And with all of the other trims you'll do in the course of your editing, these cuts begin to (haha!) add up, right?
Another tip (i.e. personal pet peeve) from Klugula Screenplay Consulting!
Now let's get to work!
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